Evaluation of Rough Cut

Taking a look back at our thriller opening , we realised that we had to make a variety of improvements , until it was considered as a final piece. While looking at our rough cut , I will be analysing it in terms of editing, camera angles and sound. 

First of all, for our camera angles we had made sure that we had used a wide range of camera angles. We began the shot with a wide shot which then carries us into an over the shoulder shot. This effects the audience as it makes the park look isolated and the man very mysterious so they do not know what is going to happen. We then use a close up of the man who is being held captive, showing the emotion and fear that the hostage has. The use of an over the shoulder shot and a high angle captures the anxiety and fear of the hostage, it also shows the immediate threat that the protagonist has with the bat. The high angle also shows the nature of the shot and the power that is over him. It also shows the protagonist bringing themselves down to their level, and say "time's  ticking" . This demonstrates the power that the protagonist has over the hostage and also that the protagonist is bringing herself down to his level. 

In our rough cut, the lighting is very well lit so that each scene has the focus that it should have. Shooting most of the scenes outdoors show the natural daylighting , however it also makes the scene look sinister so is deceiving to the audience. Despite this the indoor shots , we used a spotlight to be shone on the hostage, this outlines him as important as a character as well as the information that he carries. The indoor scene also shows the location being more sinister and this casts shadows on the protagonist, so they seem more threatening. 

Sound in this rough cut, although of average quality it is not essential finished. The diegetic sound within the rough cut, are the speaking which makes the atmosphere tense. We had decided to make the man in the suit to make an different language , is because it makes the man seem more mysterious  and also makes the audience question what is going on in his mind and what is going to happen. The Non-diegetic sound in our thriller opening has an eerie backtrack which adds to the suspense and intensity of the situation, it also gives it an enigmatic theme in the opening. 

In order to improve our rough cut, we have to transform it to our final product, we will do this by adding the changes from the evaluation . We will then add the changes by adding bars to the top and bottom of the opening, so it will appear more professional to the audience. Also using this technique makes it seem like it is a real film , as it appears in most of films and it also helps to cut out bits of the background visuals in our opening. The title of the film will be changed, as it looks unprofessional and has no relevant connection to the narrative of our thriller opening. The title will also be shortened as it goes on for a long period of time, as well as breaking up the pace of the opening. Shorter views will also allow us to have a long period of looking at the names on the majority of the opening. These changes will be beneficial to our thriller opening, as it allows us to create an opening which is professional and make sure that the audience is not confused about what is happening in our thriller opening. 

How you created your title sequence

We had come up with the idea for the title sequence by being inspired by spy thriller openings and numerous other ideas from thriller openings created by students. We had created the thriller opening by filming the characters and creating the scene and atmosphere of a abandoned warehouse. We then decided to film another character who had been talking to someone whilst walking around a park, this was done to show that there was an alternative motive which had some connection with the abandoned warehouse. We had filmed these in alternative locations as we had filmed the abandoned warehouse in a drama studio and the talking on the phone scene outside. This shows a contrast between the environments because as one is dark and sinister the other has natural light and portrays a false sense of happiness. 

We did have to reshoot some scenes as some needed to be changed because it had poor lighting or the scenes looked too much like a school, or looked unrealistic.

We then decided to edit the thriller opening by adding all of the scenes together and making sure that they fit together. Also to make sure that it had made sense as a storyline. To make sure that nothing was wrong and to make sure that it was appealing to the target audience. We then editing by creating sound effects, as well as adding in effects of blood. We editing some of the scenes by slowing down the pace that the person was walking at, also by adding a hinge of a cream colour so that it made it seen atmospheric and gives the impression that it has some value of importance. 

Rough cut with video feedback

This is our rough cut for our thriller opening: 

This was reviewed by a 17 year old Media Student who had said " The thriller opening had the quality of a potential film in the making and  that it had made her feel like she was actually in the film, also the lighting and atmosphere it had created are sufficient as it shows the idea behind the storyline, also hints at a darker meaning within the story-line". The student also said , " The camera angles also show the difference between the main protagonist and the other characters as the over the shoulder shot shows the power of the main protagonist".

Despite this the student had also said, "The story-line is sort of predictable as although there is tension it still does not mean that you can not predict what is going to happen later on in the story-line, this I think limits your thriller opening but it still is gripping." The ending also ruins the title sequence as the logo and background do not match the genre of the thriller opening. This is because it is very simple and also the  background to the logo being clouds , it also suggests a different message about the film.

While reviewing the feedback from the student we wanted to change somethings because of the story-line being predictable and creating atmosphere. We changed the story-line so it was less predictable, we did this by making sure that there was an atmosphere which everyone watching the film could relate to it. We also decided to add in close ups and mid-shot of the characters to show the power, the strength and each of them. This shows the audience that there is more to the story-line and that something mysterious is happening. We also changed the logo and background by changing the title Torment and making it mysterious by slowly introducing the logo onto a black background. It also shows the difference between between light and dark.

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Behind the Scenes

This is our video diaries which is a behind the scenes of our thriller opening and how we had chosen the lighting and the camera angles which we thought would benefit out thriller opening. 

Logo design

These logo's are my idea of what production logo I think we should use to introduce the beginning of our thriller opening. The first idea is of a rabbit but very unique rabbit as it is very abstract so it is very hard to distinguish what it is , however it would be remembered by the audience for being unusual and unique so when you think of the production logo, you will automatically know what sort of films that our production creates. This logo would appear in front of a blue background and it would benefit us as blue is quite a calming colour as well as having the logo being very bright and bold allows it to stand out against the background so it draws the audience to the logo.

The other production logo is of a flower falling apart which would be very relaxing and calm and relates to all different types of audiences as it allows them to relate to the films that we are making. At least four petals would fall from the flower and float onto the water which would then eventually form the word of our title. This would impact the audience because it would be on a light blue background so would be tranquil and it would make the audience remember the production logo as something that would be beneficial to them and also a company that produces movie that are good to watch and would be able to go to, so they can adapt things into films/ TV series. 

Script 2

This is out second draft of our script and this is a rendition of out first draft of out script.

Script 2 from doloko7

Storyboard 2

This is our second storyboard for our recreation from our first thriller, however this one is significantly better.This storyboard has been re-created due to the fact that the story line is clearer and has more detail on what we plan on happening. It also shows the shots and ideas of what we want the actors to do, so the audience has an idea as well as us. This was a rough idea which could have been altered and changed due to disliking the shot or lighting and also the acting.